This is my second draft. Mums markups are in capitals.
The Eureka Stockade marks an important event in Australia's history.
It all startED when gold was mined in Ballarat DATE?? (FULL STOPS ARE NEEDED TO SEPARATE IDEAS) The miners worked in wet and cold conditions.
The miners or as they called themselves (COMMA NEEDED HERE) diggers had to pay for a licence (FULL STOP NEEDED HERE) the licences where £6.00 or in our new money approximately $1600 a day even if they didn't find a piece of gold. If they didn't have a licence they would get lashed and put in jail by the troopers. So they decided to rebel so they could get fair conditions.
The Eureka Stockade was built on backer hill Victoria, Australia. (CAPITAL LETTERS NEEDED FOR NAMES OF PLACES)The fight of the stockade was on the 2nd of December 1854 in 3.00am.
MORE NEEDED HERE. WHO WAS IN CHARGE OF THE REBELLION? WHAT WERE THEY HOPING TO ACHIEVE? WHAT HAPPENED TO THE PERSON IN CHARGE? HOW MANY PEOPLE WERE IN THE STOCKADE WHEN IT WAS RAIDED? WHERE WERE EVERYONE ELSE? WHAT DID THEY FLY OVER THE STOCKADE?
The Eureka flag looked like the southern cross with a blue background it represents the miners and the country.
The miners or as they called themselves (COMMA NEEDED HERE) diggers had to pay for a licence (FULL STOP NEEDED HERE) the licences where £6.00 or in our new money approximately $1600 a day even if they didn't find a piece of gold. If they didn't have a licence they would get lashed and put in jail by the troopers. So they decided to rebel so they could get fair conditions.
The Eureka Stockade was built on backer hill Victoria, Australia. (CAPITAL LETTERS NEEDED FOR NAMES OF PLACES)The fight of the stockade was on the 2nd of December 1854 in 3.00am.
MORE NEEDED HERE. WHO WAS IN CHARGE OF THE REBELLION? WHAT WERE THEY HOPING TO ACHIEVE? WHAT HAPPENED TO THE PERSON IN CHARGE? HOW MANY PEOPLE WERE IN THE STOCKADE WHEN IT WAS RAIDED? WHERE WERE EVERYONE ELSE? WHAT DID THEY FLY OVER THE STOCKADE?
The Eureka flag looked like the southern cross with a blue background it represents the miners and the country.
CONCLUSION? WHAT CHANGED? WHAT DID THE GOVERNMENT DO FROM THEN ONWARD? WHY IS THAT IMPORTANT TO AUSTRALIA AND TO THE WORKFORCE?
This is how it would have looked
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